My goal for revising my paper is to create a better flow of my essay, and to create better evidence. This is based on the peer revision session, I’m going to look at their comments to see what I need to change about my text. To create a better flow of my paper I plan on revising my transition sentences or adding any that weren’t there before. Then I will go back to my quotes and explain what they mean immediately after the quote before going to talk about my opinion of what they are saying. I am also going to read out-loud, so that I can catch mistakes or jumps in logic that I wouldn’t normally see just reading it. I also plan on going back through the text and reading it again, to find another point that I might have missed, or to find more evidence to support my claims. To check the efficiency of my essay, I’m going to write out all of my claims underneath my thesis, to make sure that everything I’m writing is pertinent to my essay, and that I don’t stray from my main idea. My biggest challenge personally is writing transition sentences. I find it really difficult to connect Southan and the Ted Talk, because they don’t relate exactly, so it’s hard to lead into each of them. If a challenge comes up and I’m stumped on what to do, I will either look at the comments from my peer review, or I will contact one of the peers who reviewed my essay for assistance. I also have the Seagull Handbook and the They Say I Say books as resources to also assist me.
I understand your largest challenge. Try to think of your argument as the connective tissue between the two texts. Maybe this will help.
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